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your hair, that night by ~JShay:iconJShay:



Didn't feel like a needle, even.
Felt like cotton, it
felt like lucky rabbit's foot tucked into my pocket
      in case I got nervous or
         too jittery.
                    -Smelled clean and I remember
       how it looked- a shining majesty in the
       rays of an artificial bulb, refracting off
       of a mirror, reflecting your fingers on
       a guitar, gentle and constant.
©2009-2010 ~JShay
:iconjshay:

Author's Comments

Running my hand through Nick's hair.
March 09

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-10-16

your hair, that night by ~JShay is a quiet romantic poem, the actions of two lovers almost, but not quite, mirroring each other. (Featured by ^SparrowSong)

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:iconcajra:
sweet! a calm feeling :heart:
:iconshallowpelt:
interesting =D

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I suggest cutting lines 4&5. They're explicatory and actually detract from what's above them. 1-3 are really pretty good. 'shining majesty' is very meh, I am sure you can do better than that.

Aren't all bulbs 'artificial'?

I'd like to read more of your gallery.

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:iconcraazhy:
Such a delicious rhythm.

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:iconchoirsoftheheavens:
oh, and it is beautiful, so beautiful. :heart:

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Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. :)

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:iconsugargrunge:
I can actually feel that!

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:icongalaxy-of-hearts:
Aww, this is really nice.
And descriptive.

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What am I but an aching particle of the bright dreams you shattered..

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