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for to fall on your deaf ears by ~JShay:iconJShay:



You glisten in my throat, baby,
        and glow across my pores -
    but for our love to be
         effective, you've gotta start shimmering, too.
   You, though, will remain dull and we will
                 be like either side of
          a glazed vase - sparkling Side A
                                vs. cold, unfinished clay.

   I had been content to play Dagny Taggart
                       to your Hank Reardon,
        or Hades, on fire with patience
                        to have my time with
                                  the Persephone in you.
             But now I'm out of analogies,
       cyclically suffering or accepting as Joshua Shay
                   as you play a cool, apologetic version of yourself.

       I will carry on as a
       star,
              guiding lost travelers like I do,
                            but in
                     this dark, cold sky,
                I'll keep wishing I was floating
                       into you.
I will dance freely
         with the other flames
      and ignore the jumping embers
       in my stomach whenever
          I see your silhouette.
                          I will sidestep,
                 as a fighter, if ever
                           I let my body get
                                 too close
                to your shadowboxing fists.


      Because you are cruel and
                 I am vicious,
         we must remain:  so
                       as not to fray
       the gentle fabric of your and my
                                     respective flesh.
©2008-2009 ~JShay
:iconjshay:

Author's Comments

This is the first time I've ever used my own name inside of a poem. I almost used his, too, but avoided it.

See, more fire/light references? The relationship was hot and the break-up fights were heated, but things are starting to cool down.
That last sentence was proof that I should write synopses to put on DVD and book jackets.

Enjoy (or despise,) and tell me how you feel.

Daily Deviation

Given 2008-03-26

There's something enticing and intelligent--and perhaps even slightly forbidden--in JShay's poem, for to fall on your deaf ears. (Featured by `GeneratingHype)

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:icondanteholic:
love this one too

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"Let your words be fitting".
Inferno Canto X
:iconmbryn:
You win for mentioning Dagny Taggart and Hank Rearden in a poem!

It's very yin and yang between you and your counterpart, isn't it? I love your imagery.

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"Writers aren't exactly people...they're a whole lot of people trying to be one person." --F. Scott Fitzgerald.

"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." --E.L. Doctorow.
:iconvomitsucker:
Oh I just love this!
You have a good knack it seems for being able to keep a solid theme and still allow all of those great details in without completely covering up the topic you're writing about.
Beaaautiful.

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GUN
:icondark-necro-master:
This is incredimazing! Excellent metaphorical and visual descriptions.

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Welcome to the future. Where the fuck is my robot?
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The normal make a living. The deranged make history.
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Diamonds: Because nothing says love like an overpriced piece of compressed carbon mined with African slave labor....
:iconaprilmood:
Very powerful analogy, I like the imagery
:iconurecla:
Gosh, I :heart: this. It has much meaning without trying to be anything but itself.

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Is there any difference between fantasy & calorie-free ice cream?
:iconescapetionist:
I had to say it out loud after I read it, and it was like swallowing poetry...but it was your poetry, and...I lost my train of thought
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That was difficult.
:iconescapetionist:
The italics messed up the wheels! I'm sorry.
:iconriam:
Fantastic imagery and I love the way you've arranged the text. Nice one! :)

(Thought I'd take italics off too, hehe)
:iconriam:
Hrrrm, didn't work.

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